Actually that para jumped out at me too. But more for style. As a kid and late into my adult hood I really sucked at writing. The kind of suckiness where you are deluded about your prowess based on length of prose!
Then I found Roy Peter Clark's Writing Tools book. Full of snack sized tips that can be used independently. Heavy curtains lifted for me. I felt regret shame and optimism all at the same time.
Reason I bring this up is one technique that got stamped in my mind was variation in sentence length to build suspense and action. This article (this para in particular) to me seemed like a masterclass in that!
Iain Treloar, the author of this story, is a fantastic journalist and writer. If you're interested in reading more of his work, I recommend the following:
Yeah, it's quite a well written paragraph in terms of style. Really good story-telling. And it starts so innocent as well, building up something rather mundane with trivial short and repeating sentences. And then, bang, hints at an explanation of Niemanns behaviour with that of a spoilt brat.
Then I found Roy Peter Clark's Writing Tools book. Full of snack sized tips that can be used independently. Heavy curtains lifted for me. I felt regret shame and optimism all at the same time.
Reason I bring this up is one technique that got stamped in my mind was variation in sentence length to build suspense and action. This article (this para in particular) to me seemed like a masterclass in that!
Oh yes definitely +1 on the insinuations!